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Copyright: David Jessop (WhiteKnight) Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 1199 W: 130 N: 2138] (12018)
Genre: People
Medium: Color
Date Taken: 2009-11-30
Categories: Portrait
Camera: Nikon D200 Digital SLR, Nikkor 85mm f/1.4D IF
Photo Version: Original Version
Date Submitted: 2009-12-01 23:39
Viewed: 1479
Points: 30
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I'm trying my hand at portrait work.. Just painted the spare room with one wall white and one black for portrait BGs - beats hanging cloth!!

My son Michael is the first victim - a red gel covered flash directed at the wall behind and a single softbox flash to the right of shot.. The overall image maybe a little dark but I'm experimenting with the settings..

RAW, cropped and resized - very little PP other than cloning out a few hot pixels.
What could be better here? Ideas please...

1/60 @f9..

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To Ejtaan: StrobistWhiteKnight 1 12-02 03:36
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You got a great result from this! The red background and the positioning of the key light combine perfectly!

Composition and framing are good.

You could possibly create more diffusion - aim the flash away from your subject and bounce its light off the inside of a white umbrella, for instance - which would allow a more even spread of light, and less contrast between highlight and shadow. But that's purely a personal taste thing.

Nice idea to paint the walls!!


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  • AndroK Gold Star Critiquer/Silver Workshop Editor [C: 2110 W: 41 N: 0] (15189)
  • [2009-12-02 1:13]

Hi David...
Nice portrait with so nice light...
Composition and framing are good...

hi david
you bribed the dog with a slice of bread,I hope you enticed your son with a something more substantial,anyway an excellent use of lighting the dark side has plenty of detail,good colour and freat detail,

Hi David,
Just this weekend I learned something about "Strobist" photography...
Amongst others, the guy told us also about the background... I'm not sure, but my guess is that you used the white background here. The lower part is a nice, bright red, while the top fades to grey-ish red.
I was told that, should you use a gel filter (no matter what color), you should use the black background so that the color would come out even better!
And I have seen the results!! Stunning!

I really like the way you used the light on Michael.
It's a very nice portrait! Excellent sharpness and fine colors.


Hello David,
A wonderful radiant background color,very nicely framed,perfect eye contact and very nice confidant expression of your son,superb lighting effect,a splendid Portrait,
Best Wishes,
Mushtaq Hussain.

Well David, I can't give you a proper critique because I know nothing about portrait work or lighting .. but I can say that you've got yourself a great shot of Michael. The detail on his face and hair is really great, and nice catchlights in his eyes. He stands out really well against the corral colored BG.
(nice work on styling your hair, Michael :)

I'm lovin that cowlick! haha! He has a mischevious grin here, love how you showed it here. The orange here is a little overpowering, BUT...my son was given this GLOW orange quilt HAHA! and he loved it, so go figure! I would have chosed F5.6 as a start F stop, I'm surprised F9 gave you such a nice deep DOF.... Shoot on Brother!! Keep on, I love it!

A nice portrait of Michael. BG a bit pink!

It will be interesting staying in that room next time we're over!!

Bonjour David,
Cute little kid and beautiful portrait of your son Michael, lovely pose and colors tone,
Nice contrast , shadow and light,
good sharpness too.
Nicely done.

Hi David,
The portrait is spot on! Excellent sharp and a priceless smile! Regarding the red/orange background I do have my doubts, I've got the idea that it is a bit distractive in my opinion. Anyway a great pose of your son, well captured!

Hi David..cute shot...excellent details and sharpness..nicely done.


Boa noite David
I like the light and the bright (eyes, lips) and the handsome face of your son. It is a good and very attractive portrait.
My regards

This is quite an original portrait you're showing today. Genuine, sincere expression comming out of the subject. Certainly the mood is there. Very good handleing of the studio light, very interesting and well lite background. Quite different color, but so nice, really suit this setting. A little yellow in the shadow area, but I like it as is. Using gold reflectors? Well done....as usual...))) Very nice sharpness and quality picture.

P.s.Thanks for your honesty while viewing my pics..))) Really appreciated. Cheers.

Hi David,
Very beautiful portrait of this cute child.Nice smile.TFS.

Superb portrait and well executed creative lighting setup. Love the sharpness and the expression on this handsome young fellas face. Nice paint job too! ;-)


Exelent picture and portrait by a very skilled and proud father(I hope ;]]).he looks extremely Englisch to me.
All the best and good health for the next year.


Hi David,

The first thing that attracted my attention was the red background. It is unusual and i think that really works here. About the darkness of the image, that is not a big deal, sometimes images are more interesting a little darker.

Good sharpness and focus using the aperture (f/9).


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