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Her Smile

Her Smile
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Copyright: Galder Jon Arguinzoniz (galderjon) Gold Star Critiquer/Gold Star Workshop Editor/Gold Note Writer [C: 526 W: 87 N: 574] (2755)
Genre: People
Medium: Color
Date Taken: 2010-10
Categories: Daily Life, Friends/Family, Portrait
Camera: PENTAX K_x, SMC PENTAX-DA 55-300 1:4-5.8ED W/C, SanDisk SD-HC 8GB
Exposure: f/5.6, 1/200 seconds
Photo Version: Original Version
Date Submitted: 2011-01-24 10:00
Viewed: 2394
Points: 6
[Note Guidelines] Photographer's Note
This snap is about catching Bess's smile :D
It is an easy task because her smile is awesome and permanent.
So I just tried to get her off center in the frame for a balanced composition, and applied rule of thirds for her eyes location. Also included a taxi in the background to emphasize the street shots mood.
Simple and beautiful in my opinion.

Resized and jpegged for TrekLens, adjusted slightly some levels such as contrast, hues, saturation... and sharpened before posting.

Any feedback is always welcome... for example selecting her eyes and sharpening... but i was too lazy to do it :P

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To Kilted-Arab: Agree...galderjon 2 01-24 21:37
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very nice portrait work here with amazing details and excellent dof well presemnted
tfs regards bryan

Hi Galder - I think it is too easy to say bland plattudes such as "amazing details" that really mean nothing.

I think there are some great points here, I'll come to them later, but I think the one main problem is the sharpness on Bess. Her face seems a little soft overall and I'm not sure why - the aperture and shutterspeed seem fine - I'd be curious about the focal length.

That said, Bess does have a great smile, it comes across as very natural. You've caught that nicely. And the off-centre composition works very well. Plus the background is nicely blurred - adds context with the taxi but doesn't distract from your beautiful subject. The tones seem fine also.

So lots of good points here, just not quite sharp enough on her face. And possibly a little more space above her head, just a smidge.

A sweet shot of Bess here.

The tones and the DOF are all good. The light works well enough, possibly a little strong in the highlights/lowlights on her face especially, it would be nice to see more diffuse light, but it's minor.

She's well placed in the frame but the lack of sharpness is a little disappointing, it doesn't seem to have the crisp detail it should have. "Too lazy" to give the love of your life the attention and care she deserves? Hehe.

I'm not sure I'm convinced by the composition, yes you've used rule of thirds, but I dont think it suits her pose or context. What I mean is: if it was a shot of her looking to the left, or interacting somehow with the environment, the composition would work well. But because she is connecting directly to the camera, so much background is irrelevant (in my opinion.)

Just me being critical, of course. She's a great model for you with such an engaging smile. Thank you for sharing.


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